Paper Story Board

Paper Story
Fat sassy black american man
Inside a rock
A map
Why did peter pan eat so many golden nuggets?
Focus pull and pan
Mr.Johns Emporium
Dixie Normus
Applause and Gun shot
A dinosaur comes in and kills everyone

Rough Plot

• There was a fat sassy black american man who was cursed to live inside of a rock
• The only way to get out of the rock was following a map he found inside of the rock with a mysterious note on it "Why did Peter Pan eat so many golden nuggets"
• There is a focus pull and a pan over the black man walking inside of the maze inside of the rock searching for answers
• The black man finds an amazing place inside the  maze called "Mr.Johns Emporium" and finds a man who might have answers
• The mans name is Dixie Normus and was also cursed inside of this rock and had a way out which needed two people
• When they leave they are greeted by an old woman who sent them there in the first place, just as she is about to send them back but then as she applauds your efforts she gets shot in the back
• Then a giant dinosaur that was also cursed to the rock appears and kills all of her minions closing in on you

Hansel and Gretel: Script

Characters:

Hansel: Jude
Gretel: Wil
The Witch: Adam
Dad: Wil
Mum: Adam

Opening title sequence

(Hansel is sitting in oven)
 Hansel: I guess you want to know how i got here. How I left my own sister for a woman I didn't even know. I guess it all comes with the job description, but it could happen to anyone

*Flashback to house*

(Hansel enters the room to talk with his parents)
Hansel: Hi mum and dad
Dad: You see this Jar? Its empty, you and Gretel need to get some sweets
Hansel: But what about-
Mum: Head to the forest and don't bother coming back unless you have any sweets. Now go!
(Hansel wexits the room)

*Flashback to Hansel and Gretel walking in the forest*

Hansel: Why did mum and dad tell us to come out here we're never gonna find anything
(Gretel nods)
Hansel: I Brought some bread in case we need to know the way back
Gretel: I also stole Dad's gun so we would be protected
Hansel: Thats good!
(Cuts to Hansel and Gretel lost in the woods. Then a twig snaps)
Gretel: What was that?
Hansel: Come on lets go, I don't like this
(They come to a split in the path, bot leading different ways)
Hansel: The road splits into two ways, I can see a house down there
Gretel: I think it could be risky...
Hansel: They could have sweets, that's what we need
(Gretel shakes her head disapprovingly)
Gretel: It could be dangerous we should not go there
Hansel: Well I'm going this way!
Gretel: Fine!
(They storm off, taking one path each)

(A beautiful lads catches Hansels eye and he follows here willingly)
Hansel: She looked gorgeous standing there. So I guess thats what i gave in to
(Hansel follows the woman inside)
The Witch: Take a seat
(They sit at either end of the table)
The Witch: You looking for these? (Taunts Hansel by shaking the bag)
Hansel: Where did you get these?
The Witch: Does it matter? Go ahead, try some
(The camera switches between Hansel, the Woman and the Sweets creating an intesnse scene. Eventually Hansel eats one of the sweets)
(While Hnasel is 'dazed' from the 'sweets' the Woman locks him insde of an oven)

*Flashback to furnace*

Hansel: So, now you know how it happened. My sister off somewhere else in no life threatening danger. But me, stuck in a furnace, waiting for death
(Gretel takes out her phone to call Gretel)
(Hansel's phone starts to ring)
Gretel: Hansel, I should have never of left you
Hansel: No Gretel there's no time for that, I need you to save me
Gretel: Wait what?
Hansel: Come...come to the house quick
Gretel: OK I'm on my way

(Gretel enters the house with her dads gun ready)
Gretel:(She whispers) Hansel, Hansel?
(Gretel slowly walks through the corridor, and comes to a room. She sees the Witch as she stands in the door frame)
The Witch: Who are you?
Gretel: I'm looking for my brother Hansel...
The Witch: Hah, your too late
(Gretel shoots the Witch in the leg out of anger, she walks over to the witch on the ground and takes the killing shot)
(Hansel's muffled screams come from the furnace and Gretel runs to it)
Gretel: We need to leave!
Hansel; No, we need to get those sweets
(Hansel grabs the sweets)
Hansel: Now we can head home
(As they walk out of the door, it cuts to them walking home in the woods)

The End

Hansel and Gretel Noir: Bloopers

HaG Blooper Reel from Jude Clark on Vimeo.

Hansel and Gretel

Final Evaluation

What went well:

• The locations that we used were spot on for what we needed, the woods had all the parts we needed: a path for laying the bread which helped stick to the fairy tail and the space of the woods allowed us to use different spots making a unique view for each shot we took

What could be improved:

• Location had a few nicks, this was mainly the high key lighting which didn't give it the menacing/darker effect we wanted for when we were lost in the woods. If we had of filmed outside of school we could have changed the time of filming giving us more flexibility with lighting
• Sound was a very big issue for us. It was either the wind being picked up by the microphone or us not being loud enough unless you had it on full volume, but even when we tried  to increase the volume when editing the background noise was also increased meaning we had to keep it at the original level. To improve this we could have used a separate microphone from the camera or added in the speaking after